I read a portion of Chapter 6 to my wife last week. This is a regular part of my writing process now. After I finish a section, I read it to her before we go to bed. If she doesn’t fall asleep during it (she thinks the sound of my voice is soothing, not that the writing puts her to sleep), she usually has some good comments.
So, I’m reading through what I’ve written for Chapter 6, and I’m hating it. The words don’t flow, it feels like there are gaps in the pacing and I can practically see where I started and stopped each night over the past week. I almost can’t read it.
Joanne loved it. She felt the pacing was good and had no trouble visualizing the scenes. And while she is a bit biased about my work, she has pointed out past sections in Maiden where she felt I was moving too fast.
I read through it again the other night, making some tweaks before I picked up from where I left off. I figure I’ll go over it with a fine-tooth comb after I jump back to do Chapter 5. It’s interesting to note that this happened during a stretch where my writing came in short bursts. I didn’t seem to have this problem when I was writing around 1000 words a session.
I returned the link to Elf Only Inn under Web Comics. The creator is back and has promised to maintain a MWF schedule.